Draft Out The Door

Some of you may have a message waiting. The prompts are courtesy Toasted Cheese.

Dear Readers --

Thank you once again for volunteering to read my work, which I hope is improving as a result of your input.

As always, any level of feedback you want to provide is great, from line editing to the succinct, one sentence, "This sucks."
I implore you, please DO NOT REPLY TO ALL with your feedback, as I'd like to keep the opinions relatively untainted (except those relatives who live together in the house on Bates Road).

There's a handy checklist below for those new to providing feedback. Feel free to ignore it. Above all, do not worry about sparing my feelings. If something is broken, I need to know about it in order to fix it. All feedback that's going into this draft should be back by January 15th.

Thanks for your time =)

Jen


* ACCESSIBILITY: Was it easy to follow the action, what was going on and why?
* APPEARANCE: Were there too many errors? Typos? Grammar? Punctuation?
* CHARACTERS: Were they human, fascinating, unique, flawed?
* CONFLICT: Was it confusing? Did it exist?
* DIALOGUE: Did everybody have their own rhythm, tone and style?
* ENDING: Was it clear and satisfying? Do you know what the characters will do in the future?
* LEAD: Did the opening have passion? Style? Pace? Depth? Energy? Does each chapter have a lead and an ending?
* MOTIVATION: Why did the characters do what they did?
* ORIGINALITY: How fresh was the story? Was it a new take on an old theme?
* PACING: Did the story flow smoothly? Were there too many high points and low points?
* PLOTTING: Were you surprised by the choices the characters made?
* SETTING: Were the mood and tone good?
* STRUCTURE: Does everything happen in order? ie. What if *that* scene were *there*, for example?
* STYLE: Does it sound like the author or her sister, Denise?
* SUBTLETY: Was the message too preachy?
* TONE: Did the theme stay consistent throughout?